In this excellent scheme of things you actually get a B+ with regard to effort. Where you actually lost everybody was in the particulars. As it is said, details make or break the argument.. And it couldn't be much more correct at this point. Having said that, permit me say to you what did work. Your text is quite engaging which is possibly why I am taking the effort in order to comment. I do not make it a regular habit of doing that. 2nd, although I can certainly see the jumps in reason you come up with, I am not necessarily confident of just how you appear to unite the points that help to make your conclusion. For right now I will, no doubt yield to your point but wish in the future you link the dots much better.